I'm assuming that you've named the store clerk, but it's not clear. Why haven't you named the robber or posted his mug shot? Being 'the only news outlet' to have the video doesn't do squat for you if Cliff can't take the time to read over his story and make sure that it is clear, and includes all the information that we need so that we can understand and follow it. Not capitalizing a proper name is also confusing. Kudos for including the store owner's statements about the clerk making a mistake by not killing him.
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